Once upon a time, there lived a little prince. And he was playing with a little ball. But then the ball bounced into the witch's forest where he was never ever supposed to go. If he went, he was supposed to be locked up in a tower. He wanted to get the ball, but he didn't want to be locked up in the tower. He did not know what to do. Then he had an idea...he said, "I'm going to go to the grocery store to buy another ball." He saw lots of big balls, but he didn't see the one that he wanted. But way, way, way at the top shelve, there was a sparkly star pony ball. And he said, "I want to get that ball, but I don't have any money, and I it's too high for me to reach." So he said, "I have an idea...I can draw some money and make fake money so they think that I can buy the ball." So he first used the fake money to buy a ladder. Then he climbed up and got the ball that he wanted. Then he used the fake money to buy the ball, but right before the store took his money, they realized that it was fake money. And they put the boy in prison for three years. He wanted to get out. Then he saw the witch and he was trying to hide. But the witch had decided that she wanted to be a good witch. And she had keys to the prison. So she let the boy out and he said, "thank you! thank you!" And they became really good friends forever. And they lived happily ever after. The end.
This is a good story, and, with some work, I believe it could be very good. The young writer is struggling with what many writers before her have---wholly taking on the eye of the protagonist, and leaving oneself behind. But instead this story is shot through with projection. Until the writer masters this great skill, this story will be a bit flat. Who can really believe that the little prince wants a sparkly pony ball?
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